Showing posts with label Tristan Kirk. Show all posts
Showing posts with label Tristan Kirk. Show all posts

Monday, 3 May 2010

A sample from the Harrow Times

FLOOD warnings have been issued for rivers in north London after last night downpour.

Passive voice emphasizes "flood warning", and then introduced where, when and why.

Heavy rain during the last 16 hours has led the Environment Agency to issued flood warnings for Harrow, Edgware and Barnet.

Breaking down the intro: more details of Why, Where, and who issued flood warnings.

The alerts are for areas surrounding the River Pinn and its tributary the Woodridings Stream, the River Brent through Hendon, Brent Cross and Wembley, as well as smaller waterways in Kenton, Stanmore, Edgware, and Colindale.

More details about Where.

These are part of 13 flood warnings issued for the Thames region due to the rain sweeping across the south east of the country.

Giving readers a national picture - These are part of 13 flood warnings issued for the Thames region; the rain sweeping across the south east of the country.

Police have also warned motorists to take care today due to the wet conditions.

Additional information: police's warning to motorists.

By Tristan Kirk , from the Harrow Times

Some intro samples from the Harrow Times

Good intro samples I found from the Harrow Times, with their second paragraphs and quotes etc:

HARROW'S health services are facing “massive cuts” because of a £32m black hole in their budget, Tory politicians have warned.

Here the reporter put "Tory politicians have warned" at the end of the intro, starting with present tense by using "Harrow's health are facing" to introduce the angle he chose.

Conservative candidates Bob Blackman and Rachel Joyce have pointed to the multimillion pound deficit in NHS Harrow's budget as an indication that Labour are “mismanaging” the NHS.

Second paragraph breaked down the intro: who are the Tory candidates? (Conservative candidates Bob Blackman and Rachel Joyce); a £32m black hole? (the multimillion pound deficit in NHS Harrow's budget); 'an indication that Labour are "mismanaging" the NHS' is to introduce the quote, see the following paragraph:

Mr Blackman, who is standing in Harrow East, said: “Despite Labour’s claims to champion the NHS, these figures show how Harrow residents are facing significant cuts in healthcare spending on Labour’s watch.

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THE future of health services has been put at the forefront of the General Election as the battle to be Harrow's MPs enters the final week.

Here the reporter used passive voice to emphasize "The future of health services" - THE future of health services has been put at the forefront of the General Election; "as the battle to be Harrow's MPs enters the fnal week" is to remind readers the final week before polling day is coming.

Andrew Lansley, shadow health secretary, toured Northwick Park Hospital on Thursday and promised to cut away unnecessary targets and levels of bureaucracy if the Tories take power.

Second paragraph introduced who, when, where, and what; then immediately linked with Andrew Lansley's quote:

He said: “We are going to get rid of the politically driven targets, some of the process targets that are not needed.

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By Tristan Kirk , from the Harrow Times